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Had he been asleep, he would never have heard the soft click of the front door.

But to Roy, sleepless and bereft, the sound struck him like a blow and his entire body reacted, jerking beneath the sheets. Scarcely daring to breathe, he listened for the familiar footsteps coming up the stairs, the sound of the door across the hall. However, nothing more came, and he clenched his fists in the sheets, thinking, he's gone to get a drink before bed, he'll be up soon.

Every sense honed to attention, to Ed, he still only just caught the sound of the back door.

For a moment Roy lay there, dazed with exhaustion and unhappiness, swamped with confusion, inventing and discarding reasons why Ed would go out to the backyard at this time of night. Why Ed had been gone all day, why he'd clearly been avoiding him, why he'd gone back on his word to give him an answer...

After nearly half an hour of roiling anxiety, he sat up, shoving the bedding aside and hauling himself from the bed. This had to stop, one way or another. If it was over, fine, but let it be over now, not hanging on in this interminable limbo that had been lingering for days. It wasn't bravery, but weariness and a certain fatalism that sent him down the stairs, padding through the kitchen to the back door, where he rested one hand on the doorknob and paused, just for a second, to hold onto his last moment of uncertainty before stepping outside.

The summer air was warm on his bare skin, even this late, though he shivered at its touch all the same. Peaking high in the sky, the moon was little more than a sliver of light in the sky, casting just enough light to shimmer off the pale fall of hair down Ed's back where he sat on the top step of the porch. His shoulders were hunched, and although he didn't turn when Roy let the door swing quietly shut, his head lifted just slightly, a tacit awareness of his company. “Hey,” he muttered, his voice rough and barely loud enough to be heard despite the hush of the night.

His voice had dried up completely. He'd wanted this settled, an end to the ceaseless worrying, but now that he was finally with Ed, Roy couldn't speak a word. However, he was spared the attempt as Ed sighed, still looking out over the darkened garden.

“I've been really happy here,” he said in a low voice, hands folding beneath his chin. “This past year. Never expected it.”

Throat aching, Roy sunk down on the step beside him, close enough that their shoulders nearly brushed. “I'm glad you've been happy,” he said softly. “I've always wanted that for you.”

Ed made a little humming sound of agreement, his bangs hiding his face. It made Roy want to push them aside, to see his face, although that led to other thoughts as well; the way that strong jawline fit against his palm, the sound Ed would make if he kissed the corner of his mouth... Pulling himself back to the present, he cleared his throat, forcing out the words. “I was thinking... even if you're moving out. My house is always open to you. I... Keep the key.”

For a moment, he thought the other man was going to turn him down. But Ed gave a choking little laugh, tilting his head to the side to give him a pained smile as though he'd said something cruel, yet funny. “I turned down the flat, Roy.”

His face must have given him away, going slack and incredulous, his breath drawing in sharp. “You did?” So focused on disaster, he'd never given much weight to the thought that Ed might actually stay. “But how... was it... was Julia very disappointed?”

The smile on Ed's face, which hadn't been a terribly happy one from the start, seemed to fall apart. “Yeah. She was a little upset.”

“I'm sorry,” Roy told him, but Ed shook his head.

“I'm not.”

There was silence then. Even the sounds of cars had quieted, as the city slept around them. Near the back of the yard a cricket sang once, a shrill, shivering call that hung in the darkness.

“I didn't want you to go,” Roy admitted, wanting to close the strange distance the night had put between them.

He felt Ed stir at his side. “I know you didn't.” A pause. “I had to make a choice.”

“I would never ask you to stay just because I-” he began, but the words stuttered out. Ed was shaking his head again, that faintly wry smile back again.

“You really don't get it, do you?” he asked, and as it was apparent he wasn't actually looking for an answer, Roy didn't reply.

They sat quietly for a few minutes, listening to the murmurs of the night. Eventually Roy tilted his head down, staring at the steps. “Where were you today?” he asked, and Ed shrugged.

“Out. Around. I... I needed to think. So I took a walk, went down to the river. It's a good place to think, reminds me of Riesembul. Especially at night... Been going down there a lot lately.”

All those late nights... “Weren't you staying with Julia most nights?”

“Are you kidding?” The young man snorted in disbelief. “You don't really think... Fuck, no, Roy. She's not... we never...” He trailed off, but his meaning was clear enough. Roy didn't think he'd ever felt such relief.

“Hey... can I ask you something?” Ed nudged up against him, and he nodded.

“Of course.”

“After Ishval...” he said haltingly, and Roy drew his head back in surprise, “after what happened there. What you had to do. Did you ever want... to be close to something innocent, after that? To feel something clean?”

The non sequitur threw him into confusion for a moment, but Roy had known Ed long enough to understand that sometimes he applied an oblique, circular logic to his conversations. And despite his reticence to talk about that portion of his past, he was disinclined to shrug off the subject as he normally would. The need to touch something pure, to hope that it could wipe some of your sins away... those memories were bitter, but he wouldn't deny their truth. “Yes,” he whispered. “I remember that feeling.”

“Yeah.” Ed stared out into the darkness, unseeing. “I broke up with Julia today.”

The admission came like a smack in the face, completely unexpected, and Roy gaped at the man sitting calmly beside him. “What? You... I thought...” He couldn't find any words to explain, they were too chaotic to make any sense. “Ed... why?”

The young man was silent for a long moment. Finally he sighed, head hanging low between his shoulders, as though he wasn't able to support its weight. “I couldn't be the person she wanted. And she would never be what I needed.”

Roy took a moment to let that sink in. “How did she take it?”

A shrug bumped his shoulder once again. “She took it alright,” Ed ventured, then stopped, shook his head savagely. “No,” he corrected himself. “Fuck... she cried her goddamn eyes out. I felt like shit, and I deserved it.” His shoulders trembled, and he threw his head back, staring up into the sky, blinking hard. “Made me cry too. I never meant to hurt her. But when I figured out... I had to. I had to. It was the only thing that was fair.” He scrubbed his eyes with the back of one arm, voice gone ragged. “Only thing that ever felt worse than this was when I saw what I'd done to Al...”

He couldn't resist reaching out to the young man, clasping his shoulder in commiseration though what Roy truly wanted was to pull Ed into his arms, stroke the pain from his forehead. “I... I really don't understand. If you had asked me as little as a few days ago, I'd have wagered you'd be married before the end of summer.”

“I wouldn't... Roy,” Ed lifted his head, turning to face him with a small frown. “I couldn't. She isn't someone I could be with like that.”

It made no sense. “I don't-” he began again, and Ed sighed.

“She's innocent. I mean, completely. I told you once, I've never met anyone like her before. And it felt really good, being around someone like that. Someone who couldn't even imagine all the bad shit I've seen. And done. Made me feel like a normal person, almost.”

Roy nodded, finally understanding the earlier comment, as well as Ed's attraction to the girl. But the rest, to leave her, give up that comfort... “So why would you break up?”

“If I stayed,” Ed said slowly, leaning into Roy's touch, “I'd kill what I loved about her. That purity. Roy, she doesn't even know how I got this.” Automail fingers curled, clicking softly, the moonlight gathering on its planes with gentle luminescence. “She thinks it was an accident, and I could never bring myself to tell her the truth. She couldn't deal with the shit in my past, I don't even want her to, and if I told her... How could I stay with her, when I can't even tell her about myself?” A bitter light flared in his eyes. “Life fucks everyone out of their innocence eventually, but I won't be the one who does it to her. I've ruined enough people.”

“Ed, you haven't,” Roy protested, hating the frustration and self-loathing he heard in the young man's voice. But Ed rode over him, refusing to meet his eyes.

“And she's too young for something this serious. Only nineteen- she's got her whole goddamn life ahead of her. And fuck, I know, I'm not much older than that... but damn it Roy, I'm at least twice as old as anyone else my age. All the shit I've been through... It wouldn't be fair. Not to either one of us. I couldn't confide in her, she'd never know me... and what the hell kind of relationship would that be?”

“But love...” Roy whispered, even as his heart shuddered at the traitorous word. “You loved her.”

Ed sat very still, before turning slightly, his knee brushing against Roy's thigh as those eyes, bright even in the moon's sallow glow, fixed him with a resolute stare. “Yeah. But she wasn't ever someone I could have, not in the way you're talking about. And I... I don't want that with her anyway.”

Something in Ed's gaze held Roy mute. There was sadness there, and regret, but also determination. And something else- something his heart fluttered to recognize, but his mind would not accept. Something that drew him back to a different evening, under a different moon, and a world dipped in silver...

“I don't want something that isn't real,” Ed told him, and the night was contracting down to single, small points; those twin golden eyes, the press of a knee into his leg, the small, calloused hand creeping into his own. “I don't want to be with someone who doesn't even know me.”

Roy's heart tightened until every beat made it feet like it was going to burst. All conscious thought had been stripped from him; he simply reacted, clenching tight on the hand in his as an anchor, the other reaching blindly out to cup the back of Ed's neck, pulling him forward. Their mouths met in an uncoordinated clash, desperate and needy, fumbling to find a rhythm yet too starved to slow down. It never entered into Roy's mind to ask, but Ed's response- just as frantic as his own- was answer enough.

It was glorious, delirious. Everything was broken into fragments- the heat of Ed's mouth against his, the wet curl of tongue on tongue, the bruising force of kiss after kiss. Teeth scraped hard against Roy's lip, pain sparking amidst the sweetness and Ed tilted his head, tongue darting out to lap at the injury.

They eventually had to part to breathe, foreheads still touching, afraid to separate any further. Ed's fingers curled possessively in his hair, and his own hands had found their way around the other man's waist, beneath his shirt, splaying across warm skin. Roy's mind was finally starting to catch up with what was happening, and tremors climbed up his back until he was clinging to Ed and certain he was going to die from the raw need spiraling through him, a chemical reaction that was slowly devouring him.

Ed panted against his chin, and Roy drank in those little breaths greedily. “I don't care,” Ed stammered, voice as thin and unsteady as Roy felt. “Don't care if I'm weird, I don't care. I just want- this, want you, can't even think about anything else...”

Somehow, he found a voice. “Yours,” trailing kisses along the young man's jaw, whispering beside his ear, “I couldn't... no one else... Ed...” Coherence was beyond him; it was a herculean effort simply to form words at all, but Ed moaned softly, breathing his name back to him as he tugged Roy's face up, bringing their lips together once more.

He lost time, sitting there on the porch with Ed, kissing, touching, drowning in sensation. It was more than Roy had ever dared hope for, frightening in its intensity, but after suppressing his desire for so long its liberation overwhelmed any obstacle his conscious mind might have thrown up. And it felt so good, to finally be allowed this- the stroke of tongue on palate, teeth grazing the tender spots of neck and shoulder, the indistinct, pleased sounds the young man made as his lips worked down his neck.

“Are you sure?” Roy murmured to him at some point, after they'd slowed, calmed. One finger traced along the ridge of collarbone, and Ed hummed deep in his throat. “This isn't conventional, and you and I... we aren't...”

Ed snorted, punching him lightly in the shoulder and grinning. “Weren't you listening, you shit?”

But Roy held his eyes, his mood abruptly serious. “I want you to be sure.”

A sigh wafted from the other man, and for a moment Roy was frightened that his hopes were drifting away with it. Then Ed shook his head, his smile returning. “Idiot. You really think I haven't thought about this?” The look in his eyes sharpened, growing cautious, and he added, “What about you?”

Roy let out a mirthless chuckle. “Absolutely. Sophie told me I was in love with someone else...” He paused, not having intended to say so much, but Ed was watching him expectantly, and he couldn't stop now. “There's no one who has ever meant so much to me.”

Ed responded by pulling him in for another kiss, slow and deep, and when he finally let go there was a look of tenderness on his face that Roy had only ever seen directed at Alphonse. “You always seemed happy, with all those women, and as long as you were happy...” He was silent for a moment. “I just wanted to know that you were okay, and to be around you. Never did put it together, but then you kissed me... But there was Sophie, and then Julia too, and you never dated guys...”

“Have you?” Roy asked, and Ed laughed.

“Fuck no! Told you before, I'm not gay.”

“But then this...”

“I don't know,” Ed admitted. “This is different. I mean, yeah, you're a guy, and I'm a guy, and... I don't know, Roy. Just know that as long as it's us, I don't mind.”

“If we're... together,” Roy said, tasting the word, appreciating its implications, “then what... how do...” He stopped, face starting to redden, a terrible sense of inadequacy creeping over him. “I mean, I don't know if I can...”

“Hey.” Hands, both warm and cool, cupped his face, a metal thumb gently stroking his cheek. Calm, gold eyes met his, and Ed gave him a look that silenced him instantly. “It doesn't matter. We'll figure it out, okay? And if it doesn't happen...” He shrugged, unconcerned. “All I want is to be with you.”

“Yes,” Roy whispered, eyes prickling with emotion until he closed them, felt Ed's lips ghosting over his lids. “Just the two of us.”

“Just us,” Ed agreed. “Just us.”

*****


They dithered in the hallway at the top of the stairs, hands still clasped, their motions tentative and uncertain. A quick whisper, another caress, a kiss, and Ed rubbed his eyes, smiling apologetically. “Got to sleep,” he murmured, making no move to pull away. “Gonna fall over where I stand.”

Roy caught his chin, tipping his head back and capturing his mouth in a deep kiss, until they were both sagging into one another for support. Ed hummed contentedly against his shoulder, and Roy turned his head to kiss his cheek.

“Stay with me tonight?” he whispered, and Ed's hand tightened on his side.

“Yeah.”

They crossed the threshold into the bedroom, solemn, and a little nervous, Ed's arm still curled around his waist, and Roy marveled that the younger man didn't seem anxious at all. Despite that he couldn't bear the thought of letting Ed go, the thought that he was going to lie down so intimately with another man had his heart thrumming so hard that he doubted he'd sleep a wink. But I want this... I want this.

The warmth of Ed's arm slipped away, and for a moment Roy thought he had changed his mind. But a quick flutter of fear pulsed through him as he realized that Ed was about to undress for bed.

I want this, I want him... why is this so strange to me?

There was a soft hiss of cloth as Ed pulled his shirt over his head, glancing about guiltily before letting it drop onto the floor in a rumpled heap, and for all his trepidation, Roy couldn't help but stare. Sun-kissed skin stretched taut and smooth over firm planes of muscle, rippling as the young man moved. His broad chest was almost hairless, but as Roy's eyes traveled down, it thickened into a clear, if thin, path descending to the button of the leather pants which Ed was thumbing open...

Roy jerked his gaze back up to Ed's face, feeling a flush burning his cheeks. It was ridiculous- he knew it was stupid, knew he wanted to be with Ed... only he'd never really considered beyond kissing him and now Ed was in his room, shedding his clothing, and though he knew in theory what lay beneath those sinfully tight leather pants, he'd never seen, or even imagined save for a very few conflicted moments. Not knowing where to look, he shuffled closer to the bed, thankful beyond measure that he had already dressed for bed earlier, because he wasn't sure if he'd have been able to disrobe before the other man.

“Roy.” Ed's voice was oddly hushed in the room, yet insistent. “Is this okay?”

He made himself look up. Ed's hands were on his waistband, button undone, but the pants still clung to his hips. Gold eyes flooded with concern met his, and the young man took a cautious step forward, as though Roy were some wild thing that would bolt if startled. “If it bothers you,” Ed continued, a line drawing between his brows, “we don't have to do this. I'll be right across the hall, I promise I'm not going anywhere...”

“Don't.” Not hesitating, Roy reached out to him, pulling Ed to him and burying his face in his hair. “I want you to stay.”

“If you're sure,” Ed muttered, fingers skating delicately over Roy's ribs.

Roy took a deep breath, feeling his nerves flare once more as Ed's hands kindled a different kind of heat near the base of his spine. “Yes,” he said softly. “It's just so strange, to know what I want, and yet have no idea of what to do with it- with you.” He pressed a kiss to the younger man's crown, shivering as those clever fingers continued to map him.

“Not so different,” Ed pointed out, a grin in his voice. “You've never known what to do with me.”

Some of the nervousness seemed to loosen at that, and Roy laughed, sinking down to sit on the edge of the bed, arms still looped around the other man. “Quite true.” He rested his cheek against the chiseled contours of Ed's stomach, feeling fingers scratching gently along his hairline in response, and smiled into that smooth skin. “Why me, Ed?” he whispered. “Why would you want someone like me?”

The fingers never ceased moving, from his hair down to his ear, tracing delicately along its rim, but Roy felt the sigh that trembled through Ed's frame. “Because I can't live without you,” the young man finally replied in a voice almost as faint as his own. “When I thought you were going to die... I don't even like to think about that. And the closer I get to you, the more I want to be with you and... fuck, that sounds selfish...”

“No.” Greatly daring, Roy turned his head, kissing along the pale line of hair that crossed the other man's stomach, heart leaping at Ed's hushed intake of breath. “Come to bed.”

After his attack of nerves a few minutes ago, Roy had thought this would be awkward. But Ed stepped back, shucking off his pants and climbing in next to him before he had a chance to think about things like gender and convention. Then warmth and fumbling to get comfortable, just like anyone he'd ever lain down with, and Roy found himself relaxing. Legs tangled with his as Ed wriggled in closer, not seeming to want an inch of space between them and he obliged, pulling the young man's head onto his shoulder and folding him in his arms. A sigh gusted across his chest, an arm flung around his waist as Ed melted against him, bonelessly content.

It wasn't strange at all. It was just Ed, whom he'd loved since before he'd ever recognized the feeling, and Roy didn't want him anywhere but here, in his arms.

*****


A gentle, rhythmic sound tugged Roy upwards into the morning, bringing a haze of confusion to his sleep-addled mind. Not fully awake, he slowly became aware of little things first: the extra warmth of the bed, the unyielding lump beneath his pillow, hair in his mouth. Annoyed, he moved to wipe the offending strands from his lips but paused, feeling the satiny brush of skin beneath his fingertips.

For numerous and complex reasons, Roy had never brought many lovers to his bed, and waking up next to another body never failed to leave him disconcerted. Blinking slowly into awareness, his eyes passed over the sunkissed vista of skin that he was curled around, and sudden recognition slammed him headlong into full consciousness. Next to him, Ed slumbered on, sprawled on his back with one ankle hooked possessively over his, cheek resting against Roy's pillow which had been drawn up onto his shoulder. It was peculiarly comfortable.


illustration by [livejournal.com profile] bob_fish


None of his experience had prepared him for a morning such as this, and Roy lay still and quiet, wondering what came next. Women generally seemed to want cuddling and sweet nothings when they awoke, but he wasn't at all certain if Ed would appreciate that sort of thing. And he had no idea what a man would want from another man in the wake of such an emotional confession. Gruff avoidance of the topic? Coffee? Had he been fooling himself that he could do this?

But how could he bear to fail?

He didn't have long to fret over this however, as Ed shifted beneath his hand, yawning hugely and rumbling deep in his chest as he woke. Those bright gold eyes opened, almost a second sunrise, and as they settled on him and a strangely shy smile split Ed's face, all of Roy's worries faded into nothing. There was no embarrassment or awkward regret in the young man's expression, only quiet pleasure. “Hey,” Ed rasped in a rough, morning kind of voice.

“Hey,” Roy replied, smiling in spite of his insecurities. Really, it was hard to feel any discomfort when Ed was looking at him like that, as though he'd found something unexpectedly good in front of him. His arm, draped over Ed's chest, tightened and pulled him just a little closer, and the young man made a happy sound in his throat.

Blinking lazily, humor quirked the corner of Ed's mouth. “My hair's in your mouth,” he murmured, and Roy hurriedly brushed it away.

“Sorry,” he muttered, and Ed gave a rusty chuckle.

“Idiot.” He pulled his arm from beneath Roy's pillow and rolled over, arms splayed on either side of the other man's head. His hair hung loose, shading both of their faces within a tent of gold as he dipped his head closer, stealing a quick kiss. The last of Roy's reticence disappeared at the gesture, and he wound his arms around Ed's shoulders, even the automail warm against his skin as he tugged the young man down again, bringing their mouths together once more; slow this time, lingering, taking his time and drinking in every delicious sound Ed made.

A noise rather like a chimera chewing tin cans rumbled up from Ed's stomach, and the two of them stopped abruptly, Roy's eyes gone wide and startled while the other man colored furiously. “Sorry,” Ed mumbled, eyes averted and cheeks absolutely flaming. “Forgot to eat dinner last night...”

Roy couldn't help it; he laughed, so hard and helpless that he ended up pulling Ed down on top of him, while the young man growled and flailed with embarrassment. “I suppose I'd better feed you then,” he said once he'd recovered his breath, and Ed grumbled something in response that he couldn't begin to make out.

Rolling off of him and onto his feet, the young man frowned over his shoulder. “You don't have to take care of me, you know, I'm not some woman you brought home with you.”

Beneath the bristling attitude, Roy caught just the faintest edge of something else, a defensiveness that made him wonder if brash, brave Ed himself wasn't just a little bit nervous this morning as well. Pushing himself up, he met Ed's hard stare and gave a little half-smirk.

“First of all,” he said sternly, “for your information, very seldom have I ever brought women home with me. I don't share my bed with just anyone. And second...” He rose from the bed and caught Ed by the hips, tilting his head down to press another kiss to those scowling lips. His voice was surprisingly husky when he pulled back. “Second, I know very well what you are. And I wouldn't have it any other way.”

Ed blinked up at him, and Roy had a moment to marvel that perhaps he was the one catching the unpredictable alchemist by surprise this time. “Yeah,” he eventually ground out, a hint of the smile from earlier returning. “Well. Good. In that case, I'm gonna go make some coffee. You can make waffles.”

“I'm right behind you,” Roy told him, pulling him in for another kiss before reluctantly letting him go at last. We have all the time we could want now, he reminded himself, listening to Ed stomp down the stairs and curse as his foot hit the cold tiles in the foyer. Time to touch and kiss without guilt or reservation, time to learn whether or not they could make this strange attraction work. Work that was, no doubt, going to be as difficult as deciphering that array, but Roy was certain that it would be even more rewarding in the end.

And speaking of the array...

Digging in the pocket of the pants he'd worn the day before, Roy pulled out the finished ring. The topaz gleamed like honey in the morning sun, or the lucent beauty of Ed's eyes and with a small smile of satisfaction, he slipped it onto the third finger of his left hand. The lines of the array pressed against his skin, rough beneath the unfamiliar weight of the ring. It was the fulfillment of a promise he'd made to himself, but looking at it now, it was so much more. Now it was a vow he silently gave to Ed- to love, to live, and to never stop being thankful, or grow complacent with those he cared about.

A yelp and a loud crash echoed up from downstairs, followed by a quick shout of, “It's fine, everything's fine!” Muffled cursing ensued and, chuckling to himself, Roy headed down the stairs, curious to see what awaited him.

~*~**~*~



Many, many thanks must go again to [livejournal.com profile] evil_whimsey, [livejournal.com profile] artemisrae, and [livejournal.com profile] bob_fish, who were all of tremendous help in refining and encouraging this story. It would not be what it is today without their invaluable input. Also, please be sure to go and check out [livejournal.com profile] bob_fish's art post here, and tell her what a magnificent job she did with the illustrations! I am beyond lucky to be able to feature her talents in this story.

I would be remiss if I didn't extend so very many thanks to all who have seen this story through to the end. I cannot express my gratitude that so many people have been reading; it's really overwhelming. Thank you all!

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Date: 2010-04-08 05:07 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] elfen.livejournal.com
Oh I'm so so so glad you posted the end tonight! I've been refreshing all day hoping to see the last section posted. I love how it ended; loved the entire thing very much. You are truly brilliant hon, thank you. I think the boys will be just fine together and that they'll be able to make all aspects of their new relationship work. :)

Thank you again for sharing this wonderful story. <3

Date: 2010-04-10 12:57 am (UTC)
ext_27574: (FMA- Roy/Ed orange)
From: [identity profile] pandoraculpa.livejournal.com
Thank *you* so much, for reading it! This monster was HUGE, wasn't it? And I am so, so glad that the ending did not disappoint- I always worry about that sort of thing.

The boys do have some work ahead, but I think they're dedicated enough to one another to find their way through whatever happens from here on out. (luckily, I am severely bunnied in this 'verse, so you may be seeing more of these adventures in the future- if only their awkward 'first time', because I have pretty much promised [livejournal.com profile] bob_fish that I would get that out there)

Thanks for sticking with the long, long story, and I really appreciate all the comments! Thank you, m'dear!!

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Date: 2010-04-08 05:22 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] a-big-apple.livejournal.com
Hooray! Hooray for Roy, and Ed, and the awesome illustrations, and this awesome conclusion! I loved the post-confession nervousness and the ring and just all the fantastic touches that made this story unique. You rock.

Date: 2010-04-10 01:00 am (UTC)
ext_27574: (FMA- Roy/Ed orange)
From: [identity profile] pandoraculpa.livejournal.com
Aw, thank you so much!! I'm thrilled that you liked this, and eee, isn't all their awkwardness and hesitancy so much fun? I hope I'll be visiting this 'verse again in the near future. Thanks for reading, and please do go tell [livejournal.com profile] bob_fish how wonderful her illustrations are! (I added the link to her artpost) You have no idea how much time she put into making sure all the details were right; I owe her so much for all her wonderful work!

Date: 2010-04-08 08:34 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] cats-bell.livejournal.com
Ah! SO glad it has been concluded! I couldn't get enough. But I wonder what I'll do NOW. Hem...more? You has more for us maybe?

Thanks for writing this, Lovely!

Date: 2010-04-10 01:02 am (UTC)
ext_27574: (FMA- Roy/Ed orange)
From: [identity profile] pandoraculpa.livejournal.com
Oh, there may well be more in this 'verse at some point. The boys just won't shut up about a few things... But first, I have a help_haiti fic to take care of. Maybe after that. :)

Thank you so much for reading, and I'm so happy that you enjoyed it!

Date: 2010-04-08 10:15 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] calysto-1395.livejournal.com
soo~ awesome
great ending

Date: 2010-04-10 01:02 am (UTC)
ext_27574: (FMA- Roy/Ed orange)
From: [identity profile] pandoraculpa.livejournal.com
Thank you so much, for enjoying the story and just for sticking with the long damn thing! :D

Date: 2010-04-08 11:07 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] chubathingy.livejournal.com
Absolutely loved the entire thing!

Date: 2010-04-10 01:03 am (UTC)
ext_27574: (FMA- Roy/Ed orange)
From: [identity profile] pandoraculpa.livejournal.com
:D Thank you very much! I'm really glad you liked it!

Date: 2010-04-08 07:37 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] oh-so-blase.livejournal.com
great ending.LOVE IT. i'm soo adding this to my memories.

I really like the fact that you made them, but mostly Roy, a bit awkward and nervous. it made the story more realistic seeing as how both of them had never been with a man before nor did they consider themselves homosexuals.

also, the drawings are just the icing to the cake. beautiful. do tell [livejournal.com profile] bob_fish she did an amazing job with that.
Edited Date: 2010-04-08 07:38 pm (UTC)

Date: 2010-04-10 01:09 am (UTC)
ext_27574: (FMA- Roy/Ed orange)
From: [identity profile] pandoraculpa.livejournal.com
Roy, awkward and out of sorts, has to be one of the greatest things in the universe, in my opinion. I really couldn't resist having him nervous and fumbling, instead of his fandom Casanova persona. Like you, I think it makes him and the situation more true to life; not everyone makes the transition Roy is making with grace and ease, and he's been pretty adamantly straight for most of his life. Plus, complicated scenarios are just more fun, don't you think?

Thank you so much for reading, and I am absolutely delighted that you've enjoyed it as much as you have. And please, do let [livejournal.com profile] bob_fish know how awesome her art is- I added the link to her art post at the end of the story. People really don't have any idea how much she put into making all the details right; I am in awe of her persistence and care in making them.

Date: 2010-04-08 11:36 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] became-fire.livejournal.com
Oh wow, that was fantastic! I've been out the last few nights, and knowing this story was here waiting for me and I wasn't able to read it has been torture!

I have finished the whole thing in one go this evening and I have to say this has got to be one of my favourite Roy/Ed stories ever. I loved everything, the lovely slow development of their relationship, the characterisation, the OCs! All that build up and tension and then the final release, it was incredibly satisfying. I loved the sort of awkwardness too, the fact they didn't just tumble into bed and start shagging like rabbits. Them getting together felt like just the start of their story rather than the end. Wonderful job! <3 And bob_fish's excellent pics were the icing on the cake <3

Date: 2010-04-10 01:14 am (UTC)
ext_27574: (FMA- Roy/Ed orange)
From: [identity profile] pandoraculpa.livejournal.com
Ee, thank you so much!! I'm really delighted that you enjoyed the story (makes me feel a little better about taking so damn long to get it done, and having to put off your fic in the process). Slow builds are honestly one of my favorite things to write; letting attraction grow at a natural pace leaves so much opportunity to show the true depths of a complex relationship like what Roy and Ed share.

(but don't be surprised if the shagging like rabbits story shows up at some point; I've pretty much promised [livejournal.com profile] bob_fish some awkward first-time sex)

Thank you so much for reading, and please do let [livejournal.com profile] bob_fish know what a fantastic job she did. She put a lot of time and effort into making these illos just right; I owe her a lot for that!

Date: 2010-04-09 12:10 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] dragonimp.livejournal.com
I love how they're acting like an old married couple right off the bat, and then only much later actually figure it out! Their awkwardness with each other once they do acknowledge things and they way they deal with it is sweet and adorable both. The gradual progression really worked well, and made the ending even more satisfying!

Date: 2010-04-10 01:17 am (UTC)
ext_27574: (FMA- Roy/Ed orange)
From: [identity profile] pandoraculpa.livejournal.com
Heh, yeah, I really enjoyed writing them as an oblivious couple all throughout the story. If it weren't for their girlfriends, everyone else probably would have seen it long before they did; those two are so adorably dense at times! But I am really glad that the slow burn paid off, and that the ending was rewarding for you- I always worry about endings. Thanks so much for reading, m'dear, and for all the nice comments! :)

Date: 2010-04-09 10:46 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] nightoperator.livejournal.com
!!! I loved this. I haven't been this taken with a story in a long time. I love what you've done with Roy and Ed and I love so MUCH that they've been totally straight their whole lives and then this happens. It's awesome, so rarely explored and you've done such a wonderful job with the idea. I liked Sophie, too and I hope things were good with her eventually.

I also love how you've characterized Roy and Ed. They were so spot-on (and I'm a huge original anime fan, so I think that means you showed a great understanding of Roy and Ed inherently). Your Roy and Ed really fit with how I see the characters, which made me so happy. How Roy came to his realization about wanting Ed, how he figured out what to do with the ring, how Ed spent time by the river thinking about being with Roy - those all just felt so right to me. Lovely writing. I'll definitely be rereading this story.

Date: 2010-04-10 01:24 am (UTC)
ext_27574: (FMA- Roy/Ed orange)
From: [identity profile] pandoraculpa.livejournal.com
Aw, thank you so much!! Writing these two is such a joy; their dynamic is amazing, and their voices (Roy's especially) always end up surprising me. I'm so glad that they ring true to you as well; it makes me feel as though I've done justice to canon and really, a fanfic writer can't ask for better than that!

Also glad that things like their exploration of their sexualities worked for you. I love to challenge myself to write things like that, things that are knotty and difficult, and seldom explored. So it really makes me happy to know that it read plausibly.

Thank you so much for reading this very long story, and I'm so happy that it brought you enjoyment. Thanks for the lovely comment!

Date: 2010-04-12 06:06 pm (UTC)
ext_11996: (Default)
From: [identity profile] dormantdrake.livejournal.com
I finished reading this days ago, but didn't leave a comment because I couldn't think of anything to say.

All I've got now is, "it's good!" And I'm kinda sad that I reached the end. I'm glad to read in the comments that you still have many bunnies left for this 'verse, though! :)

Date: 2010-04-13 02:20 am (UTC)
ext_27574: (FMA- Roy/Ed orange)
From: [identity profile] pandoraculpa.livejournal.com
No worries; I'm glad you liked it! It's a quiet kind of story, so the fact that you're sorry it was over means something reached you all the same, and I'm grateful for that. :)

And yes, many bunnies. I'm really kinda drawn to their dynamic in this 'verse (so different from other ways I've written them), and I can see a definite arc forming. So I hope to have several more stories to fill in their life together- there are interesting times ahead.

Thanks for reading, m'dear, and I hope things are going better for you. *hugs*

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Date: 2010-04-13 06:22 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] wind-storms.livejournal.com
I was glad to see their relationship didn't end up as unbalanced as Roy thought relationships had to be ;) I think this has ended up being one of my favorite Roy/Ed fics. I loved so much about it from the rich, detailed setting to the fantastic characterization.

Thanks so much for sharing this. It was a very fitting ending to such a lovely story and I'm sorry it's over, but I'm glad to read from some of your comments that there may be more.

Date: 2010-04-14 01:59 pm (UTC)
ext_27574: (FMA- Roy/Ed orange)
From: [identity profile] pandoraculpa.livejournal.com
That was something I'd hoped people would pick up on- that Roy and Ed's relationship, starting when Ed moved in, was more like Ed's ideal than what Roy assumed was the norm. They might never have noticed, but it was always there.

I'm delighted that you enjoyed it, and yes, there may very well end up being more at some point. I've all but promised [livejournal.com profile] bob_fish some lovely, awkward First Time sex, and then there is the ending to the arc... but I'm getting ahead of myself. ;) It's good to know that the hard work spent on this story has paid off, and that it's being so well received. Thank you very much for reading, and for your kind comments! :)

Date: 2010-04-18 04:15 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] artemisrae.livejournal.com
I'm.... late. Again. I hope you can forgive me for that; I've been waiting for a night when the whole story was up and I could just sit and reread through the entire thing and give it my whole, undivided attention. I've been sitting here for a couple hours rereading this and just... remembering it from the first time I saw it and remembering the anxiety and turmoil that I felt along with Roy and his confusion and his whole journey and just.

Straight up, this is a huge accomplishment. I'm not even talking about the time frame that you wrote it in, which along just multiplies this accomplishment by about ten million. Just the fic, as a whole, is wonderful, and brilliant, and a great take off from The Prices We Pay. It's a great step beyond that, and you didn't make things easy for Roy and Ed coming off of TPWP, you took it in a great direction and realistically made Ed and Roy struggle with this. The fact is, you made a huge, life-altering choice and event from the previous fic actually alter their lives in this one, and it wasn't easy, and I applaud for you for not taking that easy way out.

The OCs in this fic were very well done, and played their roles very well. Loved the point you made about equivalent exchange and the role it plays with love; also love how to drove that point home with Ed and Merisel. Love also the point you made about different kinds of love - I do believe Roy felt genuine love for Sophie, and I also believe that Ed felt real love for Julia, each for their own reasons. I also believed that they were the kind of girls that each Roy and Ed WOULD love, so, you know, well done with that.

Also, and I know I've commented on this several times, but wonderful job on expanding the world and bringing Roy's staff into it more. His interaction with the team is wonderful, helps bring both some light moments and enlightenment when needed. Seeing him interact with his staff like this only reminds me why they are so loyal to him.

So really just, wonderful job, all around. Fantastic work, in a very short period of time, and with such lovely art too! I'm glad you got such great artwork for such an amount of work. The ending it lovely, and ties everything together so wonderfully, and I cannot wait to see how the story is continued.

Date: 2010-04-19 02:36 am (UTC)
ext_27574: (FMA- Roy/Ed orange)
From: [identity profile] pandoraculpa.livejournal.com
Hey you!! *waves* Missed seeing you around LJ lately- work and life keeping you busy? And no, never late- but wow, you actually wanted to read the whole damn thing over again? *boggles* I don't think *I* wanted to read it after I finally finished the denouement! *grins*

The fact that you (and so many other people as well) have enjoyed it makes all the wailing and gnashing of teeth I went through worthwhile. I can't even say how thrilled I am that the work paid off. Really was nervous that the chances I was taking weren't going to resonate; I should have trusted you and Whimsey sooner!

And yeah- hard choices. In case you hadn't figured it out already, I don't like to take the easy path. Easy=boring, and I want to push boundaries and test my limits instead of going the safe route. Better to fail spectacularly than wind up careful and mediocre, ne? Besides, the challenging scenarios are always more interesting, and I've always found Roy and Ed's dynamic to be more interesting when the outcome is uncertain. Hell, that pretty much goes for anyone I write, really.

I'm really glad that the ending worked for you. I was just about despairing of ever knocking through that last little bit (the original ending I wrote was absolutely horrible, and thank god Whimsey poked me and told me I'd probably regret it later if that was what I posted. As usual, she was totally right. But I'm just thankful that this one presented itself- just a touch of uncertainty, but a whole lot of hope and expectation. Makes me want to keep on writing. Just...later. ;)

And I really must say thank you, once again, for all of the suggestions you made throughout the process of the story. I don't know if you realize how much I valued all of your input, but even when I didn't bring the comments up, they were there, being processed in my head. You brought a lot of good and helpful perspective to the story and the characters, and working with you was a sheer delight. Things like the comments about Roy's staff (and you were so right about that) brought a lot more layers to the story, and enhanced the reality of the world, and I don't know if I would have brought them into focus as much if you hadn't brought that to my attention.

So who knows? If (or better say, when) I continue in this universe, I may come knocking on your email once again, hoping to plague you for input. Because everything you've told me has been such a great assistance, and benefited the story so well, and damned if I'm not greedy of my betas!! (and love you guys so much!)

Thank you again, m'dear. Thank you a million times over. :D

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Date: 2010-04-19 01:57 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] nearest-escape.livejournal.com
I read this, read it again, and then referred people to it. And I don't think I commented on it once... so sorry about that. Many have said what I wanted to convey so I won't gush like I want. Please know that this was an absolute *joy* to read. I will look forward to anything you post in the future. ^_^

Date: 2010-04-19 02:43 am (UTC)
ext_27574: (FMA- Roy/Ed orange)
From: [identity profile] pandoraculpa.livejournal.com
I am so pleased that you enjoyed the story, and thank you very much for recommending it to others! And no worries about not commenting before- though I'll admit, it's always a pleasure to know that the fic made someone happy, so I really appreciate you letting me know. Thank you so very much for reading! :)

Date: 2010-04-19 07:59 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] lazylamia.livejournal.com
Apparently Ed veiled better his reasons. The both tried really hard to do “the right thing” and fulfill what they thought was expected from them. I think that Roy’s end of relationship gave Ed the courage to sort out his feelings and to tap into thing unattainable for him so far.
Slowly they both learn to create this relationship and in my opinion they have big chance to succeed.

Thank you for your wonderful story – I would like to ask shyly, is there any chance for update of Rusted Dawn?

Date: 2010-04-23 02:09 am (UTC)
ext_27574: (FMA- Roy/Ed orange)
From: [identity profile] pandoraculpa.livejournal.com
It was an interesting learning curve to take them on, to be honest. Both of them, yes, trying to do the right thing, as much for each other as for themselves, and the other people around them. But I think, as you do, that they will be able to make this work.

Thank you so much for reading this, and I'm glad you enjoyed it. And about Rusted Dawn... it is not abandoned. There was an enormous snag in Chapter 14, and it threw me off quite a bit, but I intend to get back to that story. When, I can't say exactly, but it will be completed. I give you my word on that. ;)

LOVELY!

Date: 2010-04-22 03:45 am (UTC)
From: (Anonymous)
I found this by chance, and I started to read it two days ago, and now I'm finally here, pleased and in love with this outburst of joy when the final climax of their realizations was on stage.
Marvelous story, I enjoyed it so very much. Congratulations.
MaryLover

Re: LOVELY!

Date: 2010-04-23 02:11 am (UTC)
ext_27574: (FMA- Roy/Ed orange)
From: [identity profile] pandoraculpa.livejournal.com
Thank you so much! I'm delighted that you wandered over, and that the conclusion was one that made you happy. Writing this was a great deal of fun, so it's always wonderful when others tell me that they have enjoyed it too. Thanks for reading, and for taking the time to leave me a comment. :)

Date: 2010-04-24 03:27 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] mnekochan.livejournal.com
I've re-read this about three or four times and just now realized I hadn't comment on the final chapter.

This was a beautiful read and characterization was spot on all the way through. I enjoyed every moment of it and hope to see more from this universe in the near future. Thanks for sharing your a brillant writer!!!

Date: 2010-04-26 11:48 pm (UTC)
ext_27574: (FMA- Roy/Ed orange)
From: [identity profile] pandoraculpa.livejournal.com
Characterization is my favorite thing, ever. If a writer can pull that off, then they can make nearly any situation plausible- and what a trick that is!

I'm so happy that you enjoyed the story, and with some luck, I'll have more stories from this universe at some point (hopefully soon, but I do have a couple other pending projects that are currently demanding my attention). And thank you so much for reading and dropping me a comment! :)

Date: 2010-05-03 04:54 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] das-nordlicht.livejournal.com
One of the best Ed/Roy Storys ever! Really! I love your characterisation in this fanfic (Yeah! for vulnerable!Roy and protective!Ed) and I love the idea that in private sometimes their roles as we can see them in the Anime are reversed (please don't mind my sh**** English -.-'''). Don't know what else to say expect that I really hope that we'll be able to read more fanfics like this written by you. Thanks for sharing it with us.

Date: 2010-05-04 11:36 am (UTC)
ext_27574: (FMA- Roy/Ed orange)
From: [identity profile] pandoraculpa.livejournal.com
Aw, that's a really kind thing to say! I'm so happy that you liked this story. And yes, I think that Roy and Ed in private are somewhat different from their public faces. In a place where they can drop their guard and relax, I'm willing to bet some surprising things come out. :) (oh, and I thought your English was just fine! Wouldn't have assumed it was anything other than your primary language, honestly.)

And hopefully there will be many more fanfics yet to come. I've got more than one in progress at the moment that are as yet unposted, but they're chaptered and quite lengthy. I've learned my lesson from Rusted Dawn, a posted in-progress fic that stalled last year, and also needs to be completed. But I'd be surprised if I didn't have a few more stories left to tell, and I hope you'll enjoy them also. Thank you so much for reading, and for the nice comment!

Date: 2010-05-13 12:00 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] vvingseternal.livejournal.com
I'm so happy to have been able to read the ending to this story. It's been a blast.
Very, very .... VERY well written and I'm absolutely overjoyed with the way you have written both Ed and Roy.
I really enjoy reading fics where they both have more then two dementional personalities.... Cuz, really, everyone is complicated in one aspect or another, right?
You did a great job, thoroughly awesome reading. : D

Cheers,
-H

Date: 2010-06-10 01:23 am (UTC)
ext_27574: (FMA- Roy/Ed orange)
From: [identity profile] pandoraculpa.livejournal.com
Oh my goodness- how did I let replying to this get away from me?! Terribly sorry to be so remiss!

I'm so glad that you enjoyed the ending to this story. As much as it made me absolutely crazy at times, I really enjoyed writing it and the fact that people have responded to it so well makes me immensely happy. Exploring Roy and Ed's personalities and interactions is so much fun, and if I can bring some pleasure to others in the process, so much the better!

Thank you so much for reading, and for leaving such a nice comment. :)

Date: 2010-06-10 01:16 am (UTC)
ext_7375: Tsuzuki, OMG yaaaay. (Default)
From: [identity profile] japanimecrazed.livejournal.com
This is great! Fantastic Ed and Roy characterization, and I love that it focuses on everyday life. I hope you write more in this 'verse. :)

Date: 2010-06-10 01:26 am (UTC)
ext_27574: (FMA- Roy/Ed orange)
From: [identity profile] pandoraculpa.livejournal.com
You know, the fact that it was such a 'slice of life' fic had me worried when I was writing it. I was afraid that people would be bored, or uninterested in it since their was a decided lack of action. So I am so happy that that aspect of it spoke to you. And yes, if the Muse allows, I have other ideas in this 'verse that I hope to get to.

Thank you for the comment, and thank you so much for reading. I'm delighted that you enjoyed it! :)

Late commenter, but loved it so much

Date: 2010-07-25 07:08 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] flybynight00.livejournal.com
I can't believe I didn't comment on this fic a long time ago. I loved the characterizations in it so much. Roy and Ed's interaction as roommates alone could have carried the story.

I think you write one of the most realistic adult Eds around. Some people write him like he is inherently a nutcase, and I think your depiction of him is much more moderate and realistic -- a young man with very few social graces and the sort of weirdo genius that could lead to him, say, proposing via a reference to equivalent exchange. But not an alien species.

The girlfriends along the way were very well done; they had unique personalities and you devoted enough time to each to flesh her out. It would have been easy to treat them as "and then Ed dated some red-headed chick, but it didn't go well" and focus on his relationship with Roy, but you didn't fall into the trap and the story is stronger for it.

I really hope you do continue in this universe, I really like your Roy and Ed and I'd like to see their relationship develop.

In any case, I can't wait to read whatever you write next!

Re: Late commenter, but loved it so much

Date: 2010-07-28 06:19 pm (UTC)
ext_27574: (FMA- Roy/Ed orange)
From: [identity profile] pandoraculpa.livejournal.com
Thank you so very much for the kind comments! You know, when I was writing this, I worried tremendously that the story would read too slow, too boring, for anyone to really get into it. So it still gives me little squees whenever someone mentions that they liked the quiet dynamic of 'real-life' Ed and Roy. Thank you for that.

I'm also glad you liked my characterization of Ed. He's not as intuitive a character as some I've written, but I do try and show both his genius and his awkwardness. You're right- he's human, not some bizarro specimen. It's nice to let him just be Ed. :)

And the girls- OCs always make me nervous, because they have the potential to go drastically wrong, and end up poorly received. So again, I'm relieved that they came across as well rounded and (hopefully, some of them at least) sympathetic.

I do plan on, at some point, continuing in this universe. I think there's still a lot to say here. Hope you'll enjoy whatever comes next, and thank you for reading!! :D

Date: 2010-08-08 09:08 pm (UTC)
enemytosleep: Space man (Emo Ed)
From: [personal profile] enemytosleep
Aw, so sweet. I'm glad they stopped pussy-footing around their attraction and admitted their feelings to one another. Wonder who won that bet in the office, heh (Riza seems above placing money on these things - Havoc seems smart enough to bet where Hawkeye would if she did).

Date: 2010-08-12 03:10 pm (UTC)
ext_27574: (FMA- Roy/Ed orange)
From: [identity profile] pandoraculpa.livejournal.com
Hee, I don't think there were any bets beyond who was going to kill the other and when. Fuery won the pool, btw- he doesn't really subscribe to the notion that Roy or Ed would do the other any harm. Which, hah, he's right! Though about the relationship-- Riza knows, even without being told, 'cause she's just smart that way. And the only one in the office who doesn't take things at face value. Eh, it's a woman thing. ;D

I'm planning on continuing in this universe at some point, so I'm happy that you liked it. Thanks for taking the time to read it- it's such a looooong story, so I'm always thrilled when folks persevere. And I also appreciate all the lovely comments. Thanks so much!! :D

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Date: 2010-09-04 02:48 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] bananagator.livejournal.com
Oh man, words cannot express my love for this fic (as well as its prequel). It pushed all of the right buttons for me, and none of the wrong ones. The characterization, the writing style, the slow development of their relationship, their interaction in general, how it was so good at tugging at my heartstrings, THE ENDING... all perfectly wonderfully gorgeous. <3

Date: 2010-09-29 03:04 am (UTC)
ext_27574: (FMA- Roy/Ed orange)
From: [identity profile] pandoraculpa.livejournal.com
Many, many apologies for taking so long to reply to you. My college classes and labwork are kicking my ass so damn hard this semester.

ANYWAY- I am delighted that the fic struck all the right chords for you! As much as it ate my brain, the story here demanded to be told, and telling it really was a toil of love. So it is immensely gratifying when someone else enjoys it as well. Especially since, at first, I had feared that the slow progression would be off-putting for many people. But for me, watching two people come together gradually, growing together and finally realizing how important the other is to them, is far more rewarding in the end than a hurried or abrupt affair. I'm glad so many people have ended up feeling the same.

Thank you so very much for reading this story; it means a great deal to me whenever someone does and is kind enough to leave such a nice comment. I hope to revisit this universe again sometime (there are so many stories to be told there!) and if I do, I hope you'll enjoy that every bit as much. Thanks again! :)

Date: 2011-02-25 08:45 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] goodbyemagpie.livejournal.com
That was so, so sweet and asfghjkl. Normally I cannot abide female OCs but Sophie, Julia and hell, even Merisel were beautiful and well characterised. And oh, Roy~ His figuring out the array and realising the 'secret ingredient' as it were, had me literally squeeing in my seat.

Date: 2011-06-20 01:17 am (UTC)
ext_27574: (FMA- Roy/Ed orange)
From: [identity profile] pandoraculpa.livejournal.com
Oh my lord, I'm so sorry! It's taken me forever to get back to your comment, and I do apologize for the tardiness!

I'm so glad you enjoyed the OCs. It's such a balancing act, working new characters into an established cast, and it's always a relief to know that the endeavor worked out. Especially in this case; the story would have been impossible to tell without them, and to be honest, I'm kinda fond of Sophie. She might show up again one day...

Thank you so much for reading; I'm so very happy that you enjoyed this story. And please forgive me for not replying sooner! >.

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Date: 2011-06-09 03:50 am (UTC)
psiten: (Roy x Ed)
From: [personal profile] psiten
Well done! The dialogue was brilliant, and it was so easy to get sucked into what everyone was feeling. Here's to the two of them having an occasionally raucous but always well balanced ever after.

Date: 2011-06-20 01:19 am (UTC)
ext_27574: (FMA- Roy/Ed orange)
From: [identity profile] pandoraculpa.livejournal.com
Thank you so much! I had such a wonderful time writing this- would you believe that dialogue was once the bane of my existence? But these two make dialogue so much fun, and I always enjoy letting them banter. Hopefully there will be more from this universe in the future, too.

Thanks for reading; I'm so glad you enjoyed it!

Date: 2011-06-19 10:43 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] orion117.livejournal.com
This is a wonderful story. I happened upon it again, and very much enjoyed rereading it. You write both of them so very well, and the dialogue between them sparkles. The way you write Roy’s inner voice is so compelling, it’s hard to leave this verse behind. The way you write Roy being conflicted and trying to sort through his own mind and feelings, and Ed trying to take care of him through that, was just beautiful, especially because it made Roy as vulnerable as Ed, if not more so. The second-to-last paragraph, where Roy puts on the ring, was a gorgeous summation of the story. I loved it all! Thanks for sharing it.

Date: 2011-07-02 02:40 am (UTC)
ext_27574: (FMA- Roy/Ed orange)
From: [identity profile] pandoraculpa.livejournal.com
Apologies for being slow to respond, but thank you so much for your kind words. I'm really happy that you liked it, and it may interest you to know that I hope to return to this universe again at some point. There are a few things I still have to say... ;)

This was truly a labor of love; it was a story I'd wanted to read, but hadn't been able to find, which prompted my usual response of 'so write it yourself already!' I love the idea of these two unexpectedly falling into one another, and having them deal with the idea with all of the attendant complications. And Roy was a champ through this, for all I put him through. And he surprised me more than once with his responses.

It's always gratifying to create something that others enjoy, and I very much appreciate you letting me know what you thought. I hope I can get back to the Goredverse again soon! Thank you so much for reading!!

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