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Title: So Comes the Rain
Author: [livejournal.com profile] pandoraculpa
Word Count: 480
Rating: PG?
Characters: Edward Elric
Summary: Edward cannot trust the rain.
Warnings: Spoilers for chapters 6 and 43 of the manga.
A/N: Written for the [livejournal.com profile] fma_fic_contest, for the prompt 'rain'. First place winner, ee! Must thank [livejournal.com profile] truths_in_lies for once again being my second set of eyes on this piece.



banner by [livejournal.com profile] darkblysse



He was born in the country, where rainfall was a blessing to the earth, and yet Edward cannot bring himself to trust the rain.

It seemed that the worst points in his life were inextricably bound to the patter of water against rooftops and soft ground, and every dull-ceilinged day where the clouds hung low and heavy sent his mood spiraling into sullen melancholy. Nothing, no matter what the old farm men said, nothing good came of showers or storms; no pale shoots of hope bloomed in his life from such nourishment. No matter what song others heard, the only words the rain spoke to him were of pain.

There had been a storm the night of the failed transmutation. As rain lashed the windows his brother's face had disappeared before his terrified eyes, the agony of that loss overwhelming the sickening sacrifice of his leg, his arm. A crack of lightning lit the room, and he thought the moan of the wind was the voice of the twisted thing that was meant to be his mother, dying once again on the floor.

A steady, cold rain fell on the day he learned of Nina Tucker's death, the same day he fought Scar for the first time. Lying stunned in the street, ruined pieces of his automail arm glittering wetly about him, his brother blasted open and defenseless and beyond his reach, Edward felt the heavy hand of mortality upon him. Every drop that pelted down upon him whispered accusations in their rhythm: impotent, helpless. Such a small, weak man, to think he can save anyone, when he can't even save himself.

The rainfall came once more with malicious certainty the day he'd dug up the grave of the thing that he and Al had made, the day that his father had walked away, yet again (the day he'd arrived had been bright with sunshine, and he'd not forgiven the bastard for that, either). His tears were hidden in the downpour, water washing the taste of vomit from his lips as he held up strands of hair that could not possibly have belonged to his mother. All their losses, all their pains, and it had never been her. They had been wrong from the start.

And now today- the Promised Day. The sky hangs heavy as an implication, thunder growling deep in its throat, and despite his hard-won knowledge, despite the experience he's earned, despite his hopes and yearning and heartfelt penitence, Edward is afraid. Because the rains are coming. Bearing his sins and his memories, his weaknesses and guilt, ready to drown his tentative hopes in a deluge of loss, a lifetime of shortcomings. Darkening the day, a chill breeze moaning like a lost soul, the traitorous rains are coming.

The rains are coming, the time is at hand, and God is poised to spit on him once again.

Date: 2009-04-06 04:35 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] patterson1219.livejournal.com
That was simply magnificent! And I really, really like the banner! :)

Date: 2009-04-07 01:59 am (UTC)
ext_27574: (FMA- Ed- in rain)
From: [identity profile] pandoraculpa.livejournal.com
Thank you! Glad you liked it, m'dear! And isn't the banner shiny? :D Thanks for reading!

Date: 2009-04-06 07:09 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] piss-and-ink.livejournal.com
Ominous. This friggin Promised Day. So true about the rain, though. Nice work.

Date: 2009-04-07 02:00 am (UTC)
ext_27574: (FMA- Ed- in rain)
From: [identity profile] pandoraculpa.livejournal.com
Now if Arakawa whips up a thunderstorm for that day, I'll be spooked. ;D

Thanks for reading, dear! Glad you liked it! :D

Date: 2009-04-07 02:15 am (UTC)
ext_27574: (FMA- Ed- blue and gold)
From: [identity profile] pandoraculpa.livejournal.com
I will be severely creeped out. Just sayin'. ;P

Date: 2009-04-07 04:58 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] elfen.livejournal.com
Gorgeous piece of writing. I've always has a thing for fics dealing with the rain and its impact on a person's life. What you've written here for Ed is very eloquent and very, very fitting. Congratulations on winning first place as it was well deserved.

Date: 2009-04-07 11:51 pm (UTC)
ext_27574: (FMA- Ed- in rain)
From: [identity profile] pandoraculpa.livejournal.com
Thank you very much! This one just kinda sang out of my brain; I had to do some tweaking here and there, but mostly it wrote itself. The subconscious is a marvelous thing!

Glad you liked it, and thanks for reading, as always! :D

Date: 2009-04-07 07:58 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] rare-fandom.livejournal.com
Very nice all around, but that last line just.....gah. In all the best ways.

Date: 2009-04-07 11:59 pm (UTC)
ext_27574: (FMA- Ed- in rain)
From: [identity profile] pandoraculpa.livejournal.com
*grins* Glad it struck you that way. It hit me like that too, when it first popped into my head. I love it when that happens. :)

Thanks for reading, and I'm glad you enjoyed it! :)

Date: 2009-04-07 08:26 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] screamingchair.livejournal.com
It's true that in Fullmetal it's always rain when things go from usual bad to worse. Great fic! Really loved the way you narrated it. ^^

Date: 2009-04-08 12:00 am (UTC)
ext_27574: (FMA- Ed- in rain)
From: [identity profile] pandoraculpa.livejournal.com
I had never noticed it, until this prompt got me thinking about all the instances of rain. Glad you liked it, and thanks so much for reading! :D

Also- I love your icon! Hee!

Date: 2009-04-08 12:16 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] evil-little-dog.livejournal.com
Still much love. <3

Date: 2009-04-08 01:02 am (UTC)
ext_27574: (FMA- Ed- in rain)
From: [identity profile] pandoraculpa.livejournal.com
Too kind, sweetie. *hugs* Thank you.

And congrats on your fic as well! You absolutely deserved it. :)

Date: 2009-04-09 12:00 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] evil-little-dog.livejournal.com
*points at icon, scuffs foot*

Date: 2009-04-08 02:25 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] sagesoren.livejournal.com
Very nicely done. It was like a mental montage of the flashbacks. The last line in particular was excellent.

Date: 2009-04-09 02:55 am (UTC)
ext_27574: (FMA- Ed- golden eye)
From: [identity profile] pandoraculpa.livejournal.com
Thank you! I'm so happy that final line was effective; it just seemed right. Glad you liked it, and thanks for reading! :)

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